tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post1660177826555158693..comments2024-03-16T01:00:59.945-04:00Comments on Query Shark: #38Janet Reidhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00615380335938685231noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post-85409744302689503082010-04-12T00:12:30.807-04:002010-04-12T00:12:30.807-04:00This popped up in my mailbox because someone added...This popped up in my mailbox because someone added a comment to it just now. I see that I left a comment, and when I reread it, I think *I* must have been tipping the Scotch bottle when I wrote it. The query does have a good voice, and there's something catchy about it that I somehow missed the first time. Sorry about that, author! I hope you and all other new authors will remember that when it comes to criticism, a bad review may stem from nothing more than the critic's mood or their rotten day. It's been almost two years. How did this one turn out?astrologymemphis.blogspot.comhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08094432734141490681noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post-37923920777771341122010-04-11T23:31:44.839-04:002010-04-11T23:31:44.839-04:00I really enjoyed the part about the waltzing cats....I really enjoyed the part about the waltzing cats.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post-62975551510544034712008-06-16T21:55:00.000-04:002008-06-16T21:55:00.000-04:00What'd I found myself wondering is, what sort of k...What'd I found myself wondering is, what sort of killers are they? For hire? Serial? Or do they just engage in random acts of violence (sort of like in Natural Born Killers?) <BR/><BR/>I also don't understand where the paranormal elements fit into the story.DeadlyAccuratehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08361707307035259942noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post-22445809691930606452008-06-08T09:10:00.000-04:002008-06-08T09:10:00.000-04:00I think Janet was tipping the Scotch bottle when s...I think Janet was tipping the Scotch bottle when she read this one. I don't hear anything great about the voice. It's not bad, by any means, but it's not particularly distinctive, either, imho. <BR/><BR/>What really bothers me, though, is that the hook is a mess. What is this story about? What is Angela's age? She sounds like a preteen, too young to be hopping into bed with some guy. Personally, I don't care if she sleeps with the entire 7th Fleet, but if I had a preteen daughter who was going to read this, I probably would care. <BR/><BR/>What makes Stephon's "overly-enthusiastic penchant for killing" any worse than Angela's "methodical" style? I have to <I>like</I> the characters I read about, and I don't think you're going to convince me to like a pair of murderers.<BR/><BR/>And finally, as Janet told me in my query, if it's paranormal (or in my case, <I>supernatural</I>), let us know that much sooner.astrologymemphis.blogspot.comhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08094432734141490681noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post-8518549017292635462008-06-07T18:42:00.000-04:002008-06-07T18:42:00.000-04:00This seemed like it did a good job of getting the ...This seemed like it did a good job of getting the characters and story across to me. I feel like I have a good handle on what to expect from the book.<BR/><BR/>My problem is that I can't imagine a story based on the exploration of what type of murder is acceptable / unacceptable. They are murdering <B>people</B>, right? As a reader, I just don't think I'd want to read this.<BR/><BR/>However, if you substitute 'murder' for something more appealing (I have no idea what that would be, just saying...) I'd give this a big thumbs up.Lehcarjthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17171145477602995121noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post-11671123698966343182008-06-07T14:01:00.000-04:002008-06-07T14:01:00.000-04:00I'm with Kim...could someone clarify how this quer...I'm with Kim...could someone clarify how this query had great voice???Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11431700962951592287noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post-74937689428673395792008-06-07T13:54:00.000-04:002008-06-07T13:54:00.000-04:00Ms. Reid, you may not see this but I was wondering...Ms. Reid, you may not see this but I was wondering, what did you like about this voice? A light touch of humor? A sarcastic bite? The fact it feels as if it's a talking query? <BR/><BR/>I love that you do these things. Thank you very much!Cassiel Knighthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08606179100547157063noreply@blogger.com