tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post3215109171711327529..comments2024-03-16T01:00:59.945-04:00Comments on Query Shark: #266-FTWJanet Reidhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00615380335938685231noreply@blogger.comBlogger15125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post-21469213150167240802015-09-04T01:52:11.226-04:002015-09-04T01:52:11.226-04:00That is awesome. Thanks for reporting back, and co...That is awesome. Thanks for reporting back, and congratulations!Gypmarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10023108950501721303noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post-70331643886892181092015-09-03T15:54:53.741-04:002015-09-03T15:54:53.741-04:00Hey everyone! It's been a while, but I have an...Hey everyone! It's been a while, but I have an update: I am now represented by Brooks Sherman of the Bent Agency. Although this query resulted in a lot of full requests, ultimately it was another manuscript that hooked Brooks. I used the information on Query Shark to write the query for the second manuscript (of course) and received multiple offers of rep.<br /><br />This blog truly works, and I am proof of it. <br /><br />Thanks for all of the well wishes!A.C. Thomashttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12232543025049614992noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post-46091055896405587212014-12-15T06:31:44.780-05:002014-12-15T06:31:44.780-05:00I read Sidekicked, and I totally get the compariso...I read Sidekicked, and I totally get the comparison. I love the voice in this query, and I'd love to read this book. No doubt if your manuscript is as good as your query that you'll get an offer. Good luck! Theresa Milsteinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03477761307315565259noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post-5406012748368303362014-12-14T20:04:40.245-05:002014-12-14T20:04:40.245-05:00I loved Sidekicked, and I want this book in my han...I loved Sidekicked, and I want this book in my hand NOW!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post-79883018776104003112014-12-11T14:51:02.317-05:002014-12-11T14:51:02.317-05:00I don't read MC or much fantasy but I'd lo...I don't read MC or much fantasy but I'd love to read your book. angie Brooksby-Arcangiolihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08000615140577512304noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post-15709613539777504392014-12-11T07:14:38.490-05:002014-12-11T07:14:38.490-05:00You know...I don't read middle grade books--no...You know...I don't read middle grade books--no kids except hyperactive teenage cat. But I am DYING to read this book! That's how good this query is.<br /><br />Not an agent, but this query is smashing IMO!<br /><br />I sure hope this brings the author a stupendously fabulous agent and a HUGE book contract for a series! Best of luck! (Hey, it's the holiday season when miracles do happen!)mhleaderhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02183136154454794005noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post-15751302107583184702014-12-09T21:12:11.243-05:002014-12-09T21:12:11.243-05:00Wow! I am still stunned and truly humbled by the r...Wow! I am still stunned and truly humbled by the responses. Thank you all so much. <br /><br />Nora, thank you for pointing that out. That crossed my mind too, and I'm surprised the Shark didn't mention it. I may tweak that paragraph a bit so it’s not redundant.<br /><br />AJ Blythe, you're the second person to point out the Artemis Fowl reference lol, but thank you! And Upper Middle Grade mostly refers to 12-14 year olds. Some people just say middle grade for all of it though. <br /><br />Ardenwolfe, thank you. I won't be querying until March. I have some revisions to make to the book. I want to make sure it's just as good as the query letter.<br /><br />Bass, thank you! I hope it does too :-) <br /><br />Shawna, thank you! It’s been fun to write. <br /><br />E. Maree, thank you!<br /><br />John “Ol’ Chumbucket,” the Marty McFly thing is another thing I struggled with as well, but my gut tells me to keep it. I still appreciate the insight though. And thank you for the vote of confidence regarding a publisher:-)<br /><br />Thank you, Elissa! I hope it will appeal to kids of all backgrounds. Children’s books desperately need more diversity. Thank you for the compliments as well. I hope to have an update in the 2015 regarding an agent. I won’t be querying until March.<br /><br />Again, thank you all. Your comments are truly appreciated.A.C. Thomashttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12232543025049614992noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post-70136910140582392682014-12-09T14:12:39.554-05:002014-12-09T14:12:39.554-05:00I think this is a great query. I love that the MC ...I think this is a great query. I love that the MC is a person of color--but that it's not even relevant to the story. This will appeal to all kinds of kids regardless of their backgrounds.<br /><br />I have to disagree with John "Ol' Chumbucket" on the Marty McFly reference. Marty was my first thought when I read the part about fading from photographs. I think most, if not all, agents will have knowledge of the "Back to the Future" movies, and will find the photo-fading issue familiar. By outright mentioning Marty in the query, the author is acknowledging their own familiarity with the movies.<br /><br />In any case, this sounds like a great book, and the query makes me think the author knows how to write. I suspect the author will have a pick of agents clamoring to sign them--and hopefully a bevy of publishers wanting to take on the book.Elissa Mhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10727748060605823895noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post-68576125148591328362014-12-09T00:07:52.444-05:002014-12-09T00:07:52.444-05:00Great query and sounds like a fun book. My quibble...Great query and sounds like a fun book. My quibble(we all have a quibble, right?) is the Marty McFly reference at the end. Sure, it's a classic time travel reference, but even the third of the three movies is just shy of a quarter century old. I've always thought pop culture references should be at least *somewhat* current.<br />But I'll be waiting for word that your story's been released by a publisher. John "Ol' Chumbucket" Baurhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17120550659339089195noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post-81477029397325482692014-12-08T05:50:30.775-05:002014-12-08T05:50:30.775-05:00Love this!Love this!E.Mareehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17283073495361530535noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post-43153784459361508182014-12-08T02:56:56.180-05:002014-12-08T02:56:56.180-05:00Sounds like a fun book.
Question about the perso...Sounds like a fun book. <br /><br />Question about the person-of-color point: If someone isn't a POC but they do have a POC main character, should they slip a line like that in there too? Or is it less interesting to the agent if the author isn't a POC? Also, is this more true of certain genres than others?Shawnahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04260012965060413042noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post-51660432847419953782014-12-08T00:54:37.059-05:002014-12-08T00:54:37.059-05:00As a huge Back to the Future fan, I would buy this...As a huge Back to the Future fan, I would buy this baby in a heartbeat! I hope this gets published soon because I can't wait to get my hands on it!basshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07224916720003456481noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post-25737420744928000592014-12-07T20:42:35.342-05:002014-12-07T20:42:35.342-05:00Damn . . . now that's a winning query. Sounds ...Damn . . . now that's a winning query. Sounds like an outstanding, and timely, book to boot. Agents should snag you in no time . . . pun intended. ;)Ardenwolfehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14053900506482830292noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post-67357724163690888452014-12-07T15:54:18.635-05:002014-12-07T15:54:18.635-05:00Sounds like something my kids would love to read! ...Sounds like something my kids would love to read! My only comment is that as soon as I read the name 'Artimus Smiles' I thought of 'Artimus Fowl' - which my kids also love. <br /><br />Now, I have no idea what age group 'upper middle school' is (not a name we use in Australia and I write for adults, not kids), so maybe they are aimed at different age groups?AJ Blythehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04529233142099749005noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post-54179181634402405292014-12-07T15:15:10.178-05:002014-12-07T15:15:10.178-05:00Bravo! Really, I like it. Biggest quibble I have i...Bravo! Really, I like it. Biggest quibble I have is the second paragraph seems a bit redundant between saying he's breaking some rules and then saying that what he is doing is illegal.Norahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05001952910081058448noreply@blogger.com