tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post5780762251273474468..comments2024-03-16T01:00:59.945-04:00Comments on Query Shark: #36-RevisionJanet Reidhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00615380335938685231noreply@blogger.comBlogger11125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post-39963299056835995782008-06-11T09:24:00.000-04:002008-06-11T09:24:00.000-04:00Thanks all for your wonderful feedback. Josh, you'...Thanks all for your wonderful feedback. Josh, you're pretty damn close, but it makes clear what I need to make clear. And sesgaia, Pow Pow!, you're right.<BR/><BR/>DDavehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08051930424803085499noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post-58853737720141010732008-06-08T23:16:00.000-04:002008-06-08T23:16:00.000-04:00This comment has been removed by the author.JShttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13974691019739092440noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post-18127747412205179972008-06-08T23:07:00.000-04:002008-06-08T23:07:00.000-04:00I may be old-fashioned, but in my day, it wasn't c...I may be old-fashioned, but in my day, it wasn't considered the thing to show your love for someone by drugging or abducting them, let alone killing their spouse.<BR/><BR/>I KNOW, I'M SUCH A PRUDE!<BR/><BR/>Seriously, it seems like the query author is going for a "wacky Carl Hiassen kind of charming felon" and just falling flat.JShttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13974691019739092440noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post-91349380247054546862008-06-08T21:59:00.000-04:002008-06-08T21:59:00.000-04:00Lehcarjt, it sounds like the reference is to a tas...Lehcarjt, it sounds like the reference is to a task force.talpiannahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13978075304795724185noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post-76374084456377906462008-06-08T09:29:00.000-04:002008-06-08T09:29:00.000-04:00I'm all for the Bruce Willis part. The rest: WTF? ...I'm all for the Bruce Willis part. The rest: WTF? I think the author is going for a fun story, and fun is good, but this was just too confusing. Sorting it out would be like trying to unravel a ball of yarn the cat has been playing with. If I could figure it out, I'd probably like it.astrologymemphis.blogspot.comhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08094432734141490681noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post-64719332799036283532008-06-07T22:39:00.000-04:002008-06-07T22:39:00.000-04:00They usually come in teams of twoYes. This is exa...<I>They usually come in teams of two</I><BR/><BR/>Yes. This is exactly why I questioned it. Why would one detective call one other detective his 'team'?Lehcarjthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17171145477602995121noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post-89595531810120821942008-06-07T21:06:00.000-04:002008-06-07T21:06:00.000-04:00I don't think detectives come in teams.They usuall...<I> I don't think detectives come in teams.</I><BR/><BR/>They usually come in teams of two, for the simple reason that if there's another cop witness it makes it difficult for someone to accuse a detective of coercion or other misconduct.<BR/><BR/>If it's a series of crimes, especially if it extends over more than one jurisdiction, a <B>task force</B> may be formed to concentrate on the case/cases.talpiannahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13978075304795724185noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post-71015611870294017592008-06-07T18:56:00.000-04:002008-06-07T18:56:00.000-04:00Hey Josh -I rather like your version. I spent mos...Hey Josh -I rather like your version. <BR/><BR/>I spent most of this query confused as well. What totally did me in though was this: <I>though his detective <B>team</B></I>.<BR/><BR/>I pretty much know nothing about law enforcement, so I could be wrong, but I don't think detectives come in teams. And because it feels wrong to me, I end up wondering if the writer knows what he/she is talking about.Lehcarjthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17171145477602995121noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post-68355785188407306642008-06-07T10:22:00.000-04:002008-06-07T10:22:00.000-04:00I think it's "Pow Pow Willis" as in the Batman com...I think it's "Pow Pow Willis" as in the Batman comics: "POW!"Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post-1824793175362927792008-06-07T09:06:00.000-04:002008-06-07T09:06:00.000-04:00Well, I'm thoroughly confused. If the title is som...Well, I'm thoroughly confused. <BR/><BR/>If the title is something to do with pow wows, I would assume it plays some kind of part in the story.Julie Weathershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13725236516593676381noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post-65402550849822578912008-06-07T05:49:00.000-04:002008-06-07T05:49:00.000-04:00I thought I had some of it figured out. Like Charl...I thought I had some of it figured out. Like Charlie murdered the husband (and calls/jokes it was accidental), kidnaps the girl and drugs her. The police find the dead body, and either they know already that the guy was murdered, or the wife was kidnapped, or they figure it out once they get a letter that reads something like:<BR/><BR/>"Hi, I'm some lawnmower guy taking a trip with a drugged up woman here. But she's totally with me on her own volition. She's also married to a corpse in your station's morgue. Yeah, the dead guy you found yesterday. The really, really bloody one. With the axe in his head. But listen, 'bout that... total accident."<BR/><BR/>But then everyone has two names, or they're on drugs, or they come back to life... and I have no idea what's real anymore! Chaos!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com