tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post4645948398380172829..comments2024-03-16T01:00:59.945-04:00Comments on Query Shark: #17- revisionJanet Reidhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00615380335938685231noreply@blogger.comBlogger12125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post-17290946454053034522008-05-12T11:30:00.000-04:002008-05-12T11:30:00.000-04:00Ms. Reid-Many thanks. Seriously. For those of us...Ms. Reid-<BR/>Many thanks. Seriously. For those of us stuck in the trenches, searching for some signs of hope, this blog is a godsend.<BR/><BR/>Bad news for me, though. The revision I sent you is about 90% of the query that I used until about a month ago. The version at the top (short and not so sweet) is what I decided to send to agents after not much response to the original. Glad I didn't send too many of those out...<BR/><BR/>Anyway, thanks again. With a little luck, I'll find the right agent for my work. If you're ever in the greater Seattle/Tacoma area, the first round's on me. Probably the second, too.Walterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13902709714285797706noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post-1662652427349996272008-05-05T19:16:00.000-04:002008-05-05T19:16:00.000-04:00ARDVARC - All Your Reich Are Belong To Us? No, tha...ARDVARC - All Your Reich Are Belong To Us? No, that doesn't fit. Shoot.Marian Pererahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15700524210146863718noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post-69522541657520723512008-05-04T00:50:00.000-04:002008-05-04T00:50:00.000-04:00There's a mustard museum in Wisconsin, I just foun...There's a mustard museum in Wisconsin, I just found out.<BR/><BR/>And they're having a writing contest. :-) (seriously!)Chris Eldinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11794946908789120139noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post-34464211186130656962008-05-03T17:16:00.000-04:002008-05-03T17:16:00.000-04:00I have know two girls, ages 12 & 16, who might be ...I have know two girls, ages 12 & 16, who might be very interested in this book. In fact, I e-mailed them the link to his site.<BR/><BR/>...Kittyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11772310179223546476noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post-76079779132558217612008-05-03T14:23:00.000-04:002008-05-03T14:23:00.000-04:00"Dressed as Saddam Hussein's stunt double".Is this..."Dressed as Saddam Hussein's stunt double".<BR/><BR/>Is this different than dressed as hussein, but with a helmet and kneepads?<BR/><BR/>I is confuse, but this seems like japery anyway.Belvoirhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18434724232693713684noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post-34857002216794037432008-05-03T10:25:00.000-04:002008-05-03T10:25:00.000-04:00I'm with Southern Writer. Funniest line ever.I'm with Southern Writer. Funniest line ever.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11431700962951592287noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post-72558226366056432872008-05-03T05:31:00.000-04:002008-05-03T05:31:00.000-04:00A walking erection with acne and an ipod? Oh my ga...A walking erection with acne and an ipod? Oh my gawd. I spewed sweet tea all over my flat screen.astrologymemphis.blogspot.comhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08094432734141490681noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post-25107351899950160912008-05-03T01:27:00.000-04:002008-05-03T01:27:00.000-04:00This comment has been removed by the author.Debbie Barrhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03119207763941673358noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post-7415439609194132952008-05-02T22:27:00.000-04:002008-05-02T22:27:00.000-04:00I kind of liked this. The query definitely has pr...I kind of liked this. The query definitely has problems, but the story itself reminds me of Alley Carter's <I>I'd tell you I love you but then I'd have to kill you</I> books.<BR/><BR/>I checked out the website (nicely done) and am wondering who the target audience for the story really would be. Most of the 14 -18 boys I know who read stick to adult SF/F. Girls read books like this one and I'm wondering if a male POV would really appeal to them. Anyways, it's a thought to consider.Lehcarjthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17171145477602995121noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post-156254927001131272008-05-02T22:15:00.000-04:002008-05-02T22:15:00.000-04:00Ms. Reid, thanks. I tried the "less is more" theo...Ms. Reid, thanks. I tried the "less is more" theory, but just ended up with less. I think I'll give this one another crack.<BR/><BR/>And no, I'm not John Cleese. He's taller and sports a much finer mustache...Walterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13902709714285797706noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post-43524911074544224272008-05-02T21:23:00.000-04:002008-05-02T21:23:00.000-04:00Who submitted this---John Cleese?Who submitted this---John Cleese?talpiannahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13978075304795724185noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post-14331492276791161502008-05-02T20:55:00.000-04:002008-05-02T20:55:00.000-04:00Always useful when the writing in the query accura...Always useful when the writing in the query accurately reflects the book.nonehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00415222406280230021noreply@blogger.com