tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post7536463773312684440..comments2024-03-16T01:00:59.945-04:00Comments on Query Shark: #95Janet Reidhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00615380335938685231noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post-13292861362969525282009-02-18T14:22:00.000-05:002009-02-18T14:22:00.000-05:00Why do these organizations all call themselves "th...Why do these organizations all call themselves "the Elite" or "the Organization"? Why not "Pink Sisters" or "Velvet Playground"? I mean, if you want to make sure no one takes any whistleblowers seriously, call yourselves "Friends of Skippy"!<BR/><BR/>The thing that made zero sense to me is, if these guys already have tentacles into controlling the government, why would they need an intern to get to the government. Ummm? <BR/><BR/>Is she against the tentacles, or for them? And why?<BR/><BR/>I assumed that inferno referred to a fire that killed the grandma, and that the patrents had died by fire too. However, this is a case where "show not tell" and "use colorful language" went WAY too far. Try telling more, pulling back the language to be purely descriptive, and showing the resulting short paragraphs to ten strangers. Ask each one what it means, and modify accordingly.Dal Jeanishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03652296391869599080noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post-45403047670104791982009-01-29T02:09:00.000-05:002009-01-29T02:09:00.000-05:00Mimzy--you forgot S.M.E.R.S.H. and T.H.R.U.S.H.And...Mimzy--you forgot S.M.E.R.S.H. and T.H.R.U.S.H.<BR/><BR/>And the Bureau of Weights and Measures...talpiannahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13978075304795724185noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post-35890416841458605902009-01-27T22:59:00.000-05:002009-01-27T22:59:00.000-05:00Here's a question: How many top secret, government...Here's a question: How many top secret, government controlling, evil organizations can the world support? After all, we currently have the Illuminati, the Skulls, the Masons (according to some), and now the Elite?<BR/><BR/>I imagine that the pressure to keep all these hidden organizations under wraps must be intense.Mimzyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17171454664231209553noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post-45733812749635528312009-01-27T00:56:00.000-05:002009-01-27T00:56:00.000-05:00Who is she before. Obviously The Elite need her t...Who is she before. Obviously The Elite need her to extend there grasp (is there conflict over whether the Elite or the gov't are antagonists -- let me be more clear who's the bad guy and does samantha know. ) I know its fun and colorful but try the Shark's short declarative sentences and maybe a plot outline as a skeleton to build on. This sounds interesting i just can't tell why. So I wouldn't pay for the book ( i might borrow from the library) tell me more to get me to pull out the credit carddmciiihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13776016935339771703noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post-9741906624356724662009-01-25T23:42:00.000-05:002009-01-25T23:42:00.000-05:00Honestly, I'd be pissed that I've pretty much give...Honestly, I'd be pissed that I've pretty much given up my medical career to deal with a bunch of n'er-do-wells trying to incorporate me into their infiltrating. <BR/><BR/>I'd probably change the protag from a resident to a an attending or a private practice doc... Residents just don't have enough time to get into trouble like this, except maybe Radiology residents, but they're boring and tend to be anchorites :).Joshua McCunehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17367262185912463258noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4812909700950069050.post-26179276169766866972009-01-25T20:09:00.000-05:002009-01-25T20:09:00.000-05:00How had she fallen so far in her quest for revenge...<I>How had she fallen so far in her quest for revenge?</I><BR/><BR/>Maybe, yanno, cos she's On A Quest For Revenge?nonehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00415222406280230021noreply@blogger.com