First Born is a psychological thriller of 80,000 words.
Only the death of the first born child of each of the jurors who sent him to death row will
Although G.W. Chism served as jury foreman, Kilbourne asks for the now successful defense lawyer to be his pro bono attorney when new evidence arises. Chism summons up the image of Kilbourne as the village idiot in court, a snuff-dipping redneck stuffed into a blue suit, incapable of a complete sentence. During jury deliberations Chism directed the jury to take three votes based on knowledge of trial error. The first vote finds Kilbourne guilty. Another finds him innocent. The third sends Kilbourne to death row.
Uhh...what? I can see six errors in legal procedure right off the bat. Like historical accuracy, mistakes of this kind are instant rejection.
Fifteen years later, after DEA April Sinclair uncovers evidence that forces a new trial, Chism is stunned when he arrives at the prison to discover that the once inarticulate Kilbourne is now a suave and cunning psychopath, with a degree in psychology. The killer has taken advantage of prison programs after a casual joke by a guard helps Kilbourne realize he is dyslexic, not the village idiot.
Once released, crafty Kilbourne arranges for Chism to meet April. The two fall in love and marry. He becomes the couple's new best friend, meddling into their affairs. He sneaks into their home where he replaces April’s birth control pills with aspirin.
This defies reason.
Kilbourne goes on a rampage, taunting Chism with clues from apparently unrelated multiple murder scenes from across the nation. It isn't until Chism’s wife tells him she’s pregnant that the pieces fall together.
Kilbourne is seeking his revenge through the murder of the first born of the jurors, and growing bolder with each death. April is kidnapped and held hostage as the child grows toward birth, and its immediate death. Chism discovers Kilbourne’s lair and they battle to Kilbourne’s fiery death. April and the child are saved.
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You might not be after this.
Leaving aside the question of whether anyone would behave in the way these charcters do (I vote no on that), the characters aren't personal or interesting. They're cardboard. The plot defies logic, and your legal procedure is rife with error.