Dear Query Shark,
I can see the future. Great, right?
Five minutes. That's what I get. Five minutes of the future.
Five minutes of fog so thick I can barely see, and, most often, vomit-inducing nausea to greet me when I come back to the present.
It's okay though. It's taken half my life for me to get a grip on this thing I call the Vision, but I've gotten used to it. Got a buddy to clean up after me. Got a girl. Well, she's a hooker, so I suppose
I bought a girl. Even scraped out a decent little life finding the occasional winning slot machine.
At least, it was okay. Until I started seeing the murders.
FIVE MINUTES is complete at just under 56,000 words. I'd be happy to provide a partial or complete manuscript for further review.
Thanks in advance for your consideration,
Holy moly, forget the critique, send this to me, all of it, at once. Word .doc attachment since I read everything on my spiffy new Kindle. NOW. I'm waiting.
Here's the critique: This arrived at 9:19am in my SharkTank mailbox. My normal procedure is a quick scan to make sure it's something I will consider (the shark doesn't chew on non-fiction or memoir, or picture books.) I read this, and posted it at once because I want to read it right now. That's EXACTLY the response you want in an agent: NOW! send NOW!
I was immediately drawn to the voice. It's vibrant and full of energy. More than anything I look for voice.
I don't even care that it's written in the voice of the protagonist, something that is mostly viewed as a gimmick.
I don't care there isn't much here in the way of description. The rudiments of a conflict or a dilemma are here: the murders. I can intuit that's a problem for the main character.
I don't care there's nothing else here, no pub creds, no bio, no nothing. I will read this with alacrity because it has the one essential thing: voice.