Who is eviscerating men in small town Louisiana? FBI agent Trey Fontaine returns to Raven Bayou as a handler for an undercover agent. It’s the only job they’ll let him have until that gunshot wound in his butt heals. He should never have started with the pain pills. Again. He’s hooked, using them to soothe the emotional pains of his complicated life. In the meantime, men are being butchered and Trey must remain ‘hands off’.
You've got a real uneven match here between the tone (zesty and breezy) and the subject (men being butchered and eviscerated)
His hero and godfather, a homicide cop who grieves the death of his wife while the drunk driver stands trial, has a new partner:
Gemini Taylor.. Trey loved her when he was twelve and now… now she’s determined to solve the murder of her father, a crime for which her mother was convicted. A crime that left Gemini scarred. Trey’s godfather was the cop in charge of that case and now Gemini is his partner. Recent killings—with the same MO as the case of Gemini’s father—will require the three of them to work as a team.
What the heck?? I'm totally lost here. You've got too much going on. What's the main story? Trey needs to solve a problem or what? Focus.
You've got Trey, his godfather, his godfather's wife, Gemini Taylor, her father, her mother all mentioned in the first two paragraphs. That's four people too many.
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There's nothing distinctive about this yet, and it's confusing.