Thursday, January 17, 2013
THE HANGING GIRL
INSPECTOR MA LI IS BITTER.
One swing of an enemy's sword destroyed his career as a cavalry officer.
No longer fit to fight, demoted to serve as a Police Inspector, he loathes his new
post, hates dealing daily with unpleasant people who have done unpleasant things.
INSPECTOR MA LI IS FRIGHTENED.
His family estate lies deep in enemy territory. He has no fortune. When he rides
to his residence, he gives money and food to former soldiers, now beggars. If he
fails as a Police Inspector, he may join them.
ONE CORPSE MORE WILL BE ONE TOO MANY.
Within weeks of his appointment, three bodies are pulled from canals in his
Police Sector. And then, with the chaos of the New Year only weeks away, a teen-age
girl is found hanging. A fourth corpse is one corpse too many.
PLAY IT SAFE? OR ROLL THE DICE?
Overwhelmed by preparations for the New Year celebration, his regular staff
cannot investigate the case of the hanging girl.
HIS FATHER HAD BEEN A GAMBLER. LIKE FATHER LIKE SON.
Inspector Ma violates Imperial regulations, appointing an ad hoc squad to
investigate the case of the hanging girl.
WHO ARE THESE PEOPLE?
Inspector Ma has no time to vet the men he chooses - a clerk with an abusive son,
a Private who once worked for criminal gangs, and a Corporal hiding a
deadly secret. When the Inspector learns the deadly secret he must roll the dice
again. The Corporal is the key to solving the case.
CAN HE DEFEAT THE ENEMY?
The squad's prime suspect is the son of a high official. If Ma Li does not solve the
case of the hanging girl, he may lose his post: Solving it will pit him against a
powerful enemy, bent on aborting the investigation at any cost.
THE HANGING GIRL
is a police novel in 103,850 words, set in the capital of
China during the Mongol invasion of the late 13th century.
THANK YOU FOR YOUR CONSIDERATION.
this is, hands down, the screwiest format I've seen in a query in a long long time.
It violates every rule in the book, makes up some more rules and violates those too.
It's a mess.
And I'm requesting pages.
Try not to weep with frustration dear reader. Thus was it always so: queries must do ONE thing and one thing only--entice me to read on.
And I do want to read pages from a novel with this setting. This is good clean crisp writing. I see who the main guy is, what problems he has, what choices he faces.
Lousy format and bizarre set up aside, this is good writing.
BUT if you'd like to increase your chances that your query doesn't get tossed for looking like a query for a picture book, remember: left justify your margin, ragged right.
No bolding. No fancy centering.
PLAIN is good.
ENTICING however is best.
Posted by Janet Reid at 6:46 PM