This is not Hallie's bed.
She has never been to this house.
The diamond ring on her left hand does not belong to her.
The only explanation would be a dangerous one, except the woman smiling in the wedding photo looks exactly like her. And the man she just hit in the head with a shoe is claiming to be her husband. When her father, who has been dead ten years, and her mother, a mentally unstable shut-in, reappear in this life whole, happy, and alive, Hallie is forced to face this strange new reality.
She really is married to Quinton Burg.
She never moved to Chicago to be an artist.
She may be on the road to hysteria.
Doctors find nothing wrong, no physical reason for the replacement of memories that has ripped her from a newfound life and dumped her back in her small hometown. Her father's strange behavior toward the memory loss leads Hallie to suspect he has the answers no doctor can give. If she learns his secrets, this new life she has come to accept could disappear like a fading dream.
But if she trusts him, there may be no old life to return to.
THE DIVIDERS is an 80,000-word thriller. Thank you for your time and consideration
This isn't a thriller. My best guess, not having read the pages, is that it's suspense and, most likely domestic suspense. That's not only not a deal breaker it's a big bonus. Thrillers are harder to sell than domestic suspense these days.
And this is why you put the category at the close of the query, not at the start.
An agent looking for domestic suspense might not stop to think "oh hey, she might have the category wrong here." The agent sees thriller, thinks "oh crap not another thriller" and slides right by.
If this query isn't getting results it's cause the pages don't hold up. The query is terrific. It's got voice. It's got rhythm. There are no wasted words, or drawn out explanations.
The VERY interesting omission is comps. That's an entirely valid choice and can work in an author's favor. The first thing I thought of here was the riveting movie Get Out which still haunts me. (Go see it!) Sometimes letting the agent realize things on their own is pretty smart. It's a risk, but a smart one.