THE CAIN LETTERS is a completed novel of 74,000 words, aimed at the horror/thriller audience. Merging a religious drama dynamic (a what?) with the thrill of vampire action and intensity, this dark thriller about a fierce God-fearing vampire hunter named Alexandra Glade takes the vampire premise and the Christian fantasy-philosophy to a completely new level. She uncovers the secret of vampirism, the origin of it all: the biblical figure, Cain. Against all her training as a hunter, she must do the unthinkable. To save the world from God’s wrath, she must save the awakened, unredeemable Cain, the greatest vampire in history, from his eternal sin.
First leave out all the telling. "thrill of vampire action and intensity" is a movie trailer voiceover, not a hook. Start with the character. Tell us what she does. Talk about what's at stake (not the vampire silver stake!)
What's so special about God's wrath? Is He getting impatient now? What's at stake here right now?
I am a graduate of the University of Illinois at Chicago; I have a B.A. in English.
No, it isn't. Your goal is to write a gripping story that leaves readers begging for more and your publisher throwing money at you. All that stretching the genre stuff is best left to Michiko Kakutani's review of your book in the Times.
Thank you for your consideration. If you would like to see more, I will be happy to send a synopsis and/or partial or any other materials.