Dear Query Shark:
Teenager Cassandra O'Hare knows what it's like to live in constant fear of being mauled by a werewolf. Generations ago, a curse was put on her family that makes even the most civil of lycanthropes want to devour anyone in her bloodline. After her sister is left dead on the front porch, Cassandra and her parents move two states away to start over in a new town.
So, can you imagine the questions for the realtor? "Do you have werewolves here?"
Seriously though, you're missing the most obvious question of why they would think moving away would save them? Is there a den of werewolves nearby? (Where do werewolves live actually?) Wouldn't they be safe if they just took a boat out on the water when the moon was full? The set up for a story has to make sense. You can't just say "this is how it is cause it's my book."
At first Cassandra believes there is safety in the suburbs of Fox Hollow, but when a crazed werewolf begins stalking her, it becomes clear that she cannot escape the family curse so easily. Using what little she knows of magic and the help of new found friends, Cassandra tries to ward off her supernatural stalker before she shares her sister's fate.
I didn't think the werewolves had to be crazed to stalk her. I though it was the curse. And now she knows magic? New found friends?
What you've got here is all set up. There's no antagonist. There's no plot.
Into the Fire is an urban fantasy novel complete at 52,000 words.
This is a good closing sentence, but it's probably YA urban fantasy if the protagonist is a teen.
Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to hearing from you!